For all teenagers. what do you think of my writing?

The plot's OK, but the punctuation isn't very good. Sally is NOT a good name choice. Plus, you've posted the same question already, and that's banned. Weren't you happy witht hr answers you got before? You post all these ideas on yahoo answers, I've grown familiar with the name tarek. I agree with above poster-your attitude towards the people who take the time to help you is rude. Plus, you shouls stop posting this stuff on the itnernet! If it was any good, and if i wasn't an honest person, then i could easily plagarize and take this idea and call it mine, and because it is the internet there would be nothing you could do. I don't want to take it, so don't worry. but stop posting this stuff! because you are asking for trouble!